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There you are
sitting down, trying to say much
and saying nothing,
you look at me
and I don't know what to say to dry your tears.

You avoid me
and look at me again.
I hold my face to don't fall.
And you press your lips
'cause you don't wanna hurt me.

I never abandoned you,
just love dies
when you have no place where to hold.

I never left you alone,
you were whom forgot
past doens't exist and future is no real.

No, I didn't play with you;
but I look at your face and you're not convinced.
What do you want me to do, rebuilding everything?
Are you going to love me more than you didn't love me?

And you cry and keep silence.
And you wonder why I don't cry
And I know it
I know a broken heart doesn't cry,
broken and hard, that got tired of looking at your eyes waiting,
tired of thinking: "maybe she'll change".
Maybe I would have to change
Maybe we would have,
maybe..maybe
maybe nothing!

Forgive me, maybe tomorrow it won't hurt that much.
I know you won't kiss me or hug me for last time.
I just don't wanna think of how much I'm gonna miss you,
'cause then I'd really cry.

And when days pass, while I take your pics out of my bedside table
maybe I'll remember you, maybe I'll need you,
perhaps I'll love you...
I'll love you again.
Actually I wrote it in Spanish but tried to do a translation here.
I was listening again Yiruma-Kiss the Rain"
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Many experiences around of this.
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cat12553 Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
D'awwwwwww! It's just such a sweet n emotional poem! :D
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2015  Student General Artist
:thanks:
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BloodMoonEquinox Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Student General Artist
:iconreallysadplz:
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Student General Artist
:(
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BloodMoonEquinox Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Student General Artist
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Hiro-Akemi Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I think you should use a beta reader/editor before posting the final product, however; the emotion of the piece still shows through.

I agree with a previous commentor, shorting your words like picture to pics or because to 'cuz cheapens the poetry of the piece.
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Aww! Thanks so much for the tips, well, sure, maybe I'm not that sensitive about it cuz to me the sound just mean what I have in mind but for sure for native Enlgish speakers it must be terrible, so sorry :D I'll try to be more accurate next time :thanks:
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Hiro-Akemi Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Glad to hear and I look forward to it. :]
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KoRNFreekz Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012
it has so very deep meaning. very like this
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you very much!
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MOVINGPICTURES1981 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012
So deep :omg:
Love the song :meow:
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Aww! Thanks so much, my friend!
I'm glad u like that song too :aww:
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MOVINGPICTURES1981 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
Awww no problem, me encanta yiruma :iconeeeeeplz:
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21stCenturyDamocles Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Professional General Artist
i think the translation is a bit messed up i like the emotions so real
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks so much!
I'll try to take care more about the writing.
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21stCenturyDamocles Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Professional General Artist
o i did not mean to be critical of your English. it is a difficult language to master. i think your thoughts cam out clear enough!.
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nataliemelo Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm in love with this.. This reminded me some bad things... Me and my best friend :xx Just want to read this over and over again... AMAZING! Really really great job! Congrats!
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Muito obrigado! Vocé é muito amável!
:thanks::hug:
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hoplessromantic18 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
OUCH!!
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Student General Artist
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hoplessromantic18 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
haha approved?? :p
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mj-magic Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm so glad you're writing again... :love:

you have such a beautiful expression... :heart: :hug:
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student General Artist
Awwes! thank you so much, my friend! :meow::hug:
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mj-magic Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you're very welcome Marcello! :heart:
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sallymalene Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aw.. It is sad but written in the most beautiful way!
It's all your words! Thank you for sharing them! :huggle:
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks, Malene! It means a lot! :huggle:
It is so nice from u to take time to read it. :aww:
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sallymalene Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You so welcome, Marcello! Its always a pleasure! :glomp:
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Poetic-Aesthetic Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Are you open to a little criticism? ^^;
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student General Artist
Sure! :D but if it is too cruel please tell it by a note :laughing: hehe
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Poetic-Aesthetic Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Criticism is not meant to be cruel...I sincerely hope that's not how it comes across either. (hope I don't get lynched by your fans!)

I understand that your first language is Spanish which probably explains some of the things that irked me a little when I read this.

Firstly, I would say that your poem is full of sensitive feeling, very romantic and melancholic. :thumbsup:

Now for the hard bit:
Please don't substitue the letter "u" for "you" it takes away from the poetry of the piece and makes it look like a bad text message. :(
'Cuz is not a word either. I understand (I think) that you were trying to shorten the word "because." I suppose one could argue that language is constantly evolving and using text speak and the invented word is acceptable, having said that I would argue that a subject like love deserves a more sensitive use of English.

The structure is a little odd too, but it may read very differently in Spanish.

On the whole this is not a bad poem as it is very expressive, which in my mind at least is what poetry is all about.

(was I too harsh?) ^^;
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Hehehe! Irked? :blush: yes, Spanish is my real language butthanks a lot, I really got ur points and I'll try to make it better next time :aww: :iconhug1plz:
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Poetic-Aesthetic Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm was beginning to think that I had upset you. ^^; Glad you found my criticism useful and not discouraging. :)
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AWickedShade Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:( :'(
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student General Artist
:(
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AWickedShade Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
There is too much sadness in real life. :hmm: :(
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student General Artist
yes :(
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AWickedShade Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
but let's not be sad about it :aww:
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heartinart Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you are so talented even at writing poetry!!
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SILENTJUSTICE Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student General Artist
Aww! Thank you so much, my friend! I really appreciate ur words :hug::thanks:
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